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Well, you went uptown
riding in your limousine -
Park Avenue clothes

― Pleasant Plains /// (Pleasant Plains ///), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 03:50 (nineteen years ago) link

If you said bye to
Me tonight there would still
Be music left write

― VegemiteGrrl (VegemiteGrrl), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 04:03 (nineteen years ago) link

Austin you've not only failed at the rules you set out but those rules are wrong. Haikus don't have to be 5-7-5. They do, however, need a break, or breath, or caesura or whatever the fuck you want to call it, after the first, or second, line. For starters. You can't just choose a sentence with 17 syllables and call it a haiku. For fuck's sake!

― Tracer Hand (tracerhand), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 05:33 (nineteen years ago) link

haha!

it's like a jungle
sometimes it makes me wonder
how i keep from go

― mookieproof (mookieproof), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 05:36 (nineteen years ago) link

wing understands beak
eyes call to the feet and say
"bock bock! chicken chick-"

― Tracer Hand (tracerhand), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 05:40 (nineteen years ago) link

I never heard of no haiku that lacked the 5-7-5 pattern, but I'm willing to learn from someone who knows better than I do. Which could be almost anyone. Also, in my understanding each of the first two lines traditionally describes a different aspect of a single image and the third ties them together. But as I say - poetry in general ain't my strong suit.

― Austin Still (Austin, Still), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 06:02 (nineteen years ago) link

You gotta nice ass!
I like the way you walk girl!
Fries come with that shake?

― Austin Still (Austin, Still), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 06:03 (nineteen years ago) link

Sorry, I don't know why I got so exercised about it.

― Tracer Hand (tracerhand), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 06:05 (nineteen years ago) link

So...no duel at dawn then? Damnit!

― Austin Still (Austin, Still), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 06:09 (nineteen years ago) link

when you're sitting back
in your rose pink cadillac
send me dead flowers

― gypsy mothra (gypsy mothra), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 06:28 (nineteen years ago) link

Come along and ride
On a fantastic voyage
Slide slippity slide

― My name is Kenny (My name is Kenny), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 06:31 (nineteen years ago) link

And right now, right now
It's time to KICK OUT THE JAMS
BROTHERS AND SISTERS

― My name is Kenny (My name is Kenny), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 06:32 (nineteen years ago) link

there's a man outside
in a long coat, gray hat
smoking a cigarette

― gypsy mothra (gypsy mothra), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 06:34 (nineteen years ago) link

all you poseurs get
back in line for gubmint cheese
THE MASTER IS BACK

-- Haikunym

Haikunym: Master?
Many agree; but ask me
I Beg2Differ

― Myonga Von Bontee (Myonga Von Bontee), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 07:04 (nineteen years ago) link

When I was just a
Baby, my mama said don't
Ever play with guns

But I shot a man
Back in Reno, Nevada
Just to watch him die

And that train whistle
When I hear it blowin' I
Hang my head and cry

― Glading the Wanderer, Wednesday, 30 March 2005 14:05 (nineteen years ago) link

I can see for miles
I can see for miles and miles
Miles and miles and miles

― Joseph McCombs (Joseph McCombs), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 15:33 (nineteen years ago) link

Master of Puppets
Pulled your strings twisted your mind,
smashed your dreams MASTER

― Bryan Moore (Bryan Moore), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 21:37 (nineteen years ago) link

Life, it fades away
Drifting further everyday
Lost within myself

― Pleasant Plains /// (Pleasant Plains ///), Wednesday, 30 March 2005 21:56 (nineteen years ago) link

seven months pass...

Man in a trenchcoat
Badge out, laid-off, says "Bad cough"
Look out, kid - thing done.

― Doctor Casino, Tuesday, 15 November 2005 06:14 (eighteen years ago) link

Morrissey and Marr
and Westerberg and Stinson.
Mick and Keef to thread.

― A|ex P@reene (Pareene), Tuesday, 15 November 2005 19:06 (eighteen years ago) link

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