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"Despair is a spiritual weapon, and it is the gay-marriage movement's single most powerful weapon."

absolutely EVERYTHING about that sentence (including punctuation) is wrong. pretty amazing

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:39 (sixteen years ago)

the comma separates an independent clause from a dependent clause (phrase?).

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:41 (sixteen years ago)

unneccessary

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:42 (sixteen years ago)

rong

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:43 (sixteen years ago)

also the least important and most debatable bit of incompetence in the sentence

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:43 (sixteen years ago)

and you misspelled "wrong"

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:43 (sixteen years ago)

just saying, the comma isn't rong

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:45 (sixteen years ago)

But they're two independent clauses though, right?

― Fetchboy, Friday, 6 November 2009 18:47 (sixteen years ago)

even if they are (i just looked at them quickly) the and is a conjunction so you use, a, comma

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:47 (sixteen years ago)

"Despair is a spiritual weapon and it is the, gay-marriage movement's single most powerful weapon."

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 18:48 (sixteen years ago)

if anything the comma is optional, not, unneccessary

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:49 (sixteen years ago)

The comma's necessary:
"The seven coordinating conjunctions used as connecting words at the beginning of an independent clause are and, but, for, or, nor, so, and yet. When the second independent clause in a sentence begins with a coordinating conjunction, a comma is needed before the coordinating conjunction:"

― Fetchboy, Friday, 6 November 2009 18:51 (sixteen years ago)

yeah
always remember the russian cosmonaut andorbut fornoryet

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 18:52 (sixteen years ago)

The use of the conjunctive "and" makes a comma superfluous if not strictly incorrect. It's certainly clunky.
Better ways to structure the sentence:
"Despair, as a spiritual force, is the most powerful weapon that gay-marriage proponents wield."
"Despair is the most powerful spiritual weapon of the gay-marriage movement."
"Despair is a spiritual weapon. It is also the gay-marriage movement's single most powerful weapon."
"The gay-marriage movement's single most powerful spiritual weapon is despair."

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:53 (sixteen years ago)

or better yet, don't write it at all

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:53 (sixteen years ago)

i wouldn't freak out if the comma *wasn't* there, but to call it "unneccessary" is insane.

forks you are wrong, sorry

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:53 (sixteen years ago)

i, beg, to, differ, grammar, nazi

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:54 (sixteen years ago)

hooray, RJG is back

― The Dance at the Crossroads (HI DERE), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:55 (sixteen years ago)

http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20091014123232AArbcJl

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 18:55 (sixteen years ago)

you're! the one who pointed out that the punctuation was wrong!

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:55 (sixteen years ago)

also 50% of your example sentences are way worse than, the first sentence

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:56 (sixteen years ago)

forks, clove, tofu

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 18:57 (sixteen years ago)

the law firm of forks, clove & tofu

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 18:57 (sixteen years ago)

"Despair is a spiritual weapon. It is also the gay-marriage movement's single most powerful weapon."

ftr I would murder anyone who would seriously contemplate writing this

― The Dance at the Crossroads (HI DERE), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:58 (sixteen years ago)

I'm sorry to say that the subject I most disliked was mathematics. I have thought about it. I think the reason was that mathematics leaves no room for argument. If you made a mistake, that was all there was to it. English and history allow you to argue any point.
- Malcolm X

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:58 (sixteen years ago)

xp to dan

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:58 (sixteen years ago)

LOLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:59 (sixteen years ago)

yeah that looks even more like a 4th grade paper with the period in the middle

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 18:59 (sixteen years ago)

maggie gallagher really deserves for her kid(s) to end up gay as fuck

― jØrdån (omar little), Friday, 6 November 2009 18:59 (sixteen years ago)

Despair is a single spiritual weapon, which is a weapon which is a powerful weapon which is used by the gay-marriage movement,

― Fetchboy, Friday, 6 November 2009 19:00 (sixteen years ago)

gay, as, fuck!

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:00 (sixteen years ago)

commas are a spiritual, weapon? and forks, is, clueless, about their use!

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:00 (sixteen years ago)

see me after class

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:00 (sixteen years ago)

lo,l

― The Dance at the Crossroads (HI DERE), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:00 (sixteen years ago)

"Despair is a spiritual weapon; it is the gay-marriage movement's single most powerful weapon."

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 19:00 (sixteen years ago)

^^^repetition

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:01 (sixteen years ago)

for emphasis

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 19:01 (sixteen years ago)

oh, don't, bring, the, innocent, SEMI----COLON, into, this

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:01 (sixteen years ago)

i.e. don't use the same word twice in one sentence if you can help it

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:01 (sixteen years ago)

"Despair is a spiritual weapon; it is the gay-marriage movement's single most powerful weapon."

it just reads like an unreasonably literate Kanye lyric

― The Dance at the Crossroads (HI DERE), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:02 (sixteen years ago)

;_;

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:02 (sixteen years ago)

"Despair, as a spiritual force, is the most powerful weapon that gay-marriage proponents wield."

get out of here with this

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 19:02 (sixteen years ago)

forceclovetofu

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 19:02 (sixteen years ago)

======D~espair is a spiritual weapon, and it is the gay-marriage movement's single most powerful weapon.

― Fetchboy, Friday, 6 November 2009 19:02 (sixteen years ago)

despair is a single, gay, weapon of powerful semicolons, singular in their movement

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:02 (sixteen years ago)

forks your sentences suck

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:03 (sixteen years ago)

Despair is a spiritual weapon, man
It is the gay-marriage movement's single most powerful weapon, man

― The Dance at the Crossroads (HI DERE), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:03 (sixteen years ago)

a long, powerful weapon

― harbl, Friday, 6 November 2009 19:03 (sixteen years ago)

for fucks sake
can we all agree that it is a fucking nonsensical sentiment so I can go back to editing press releases?

― you get ribbons when you're in 4H (forksclovetofu), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:04 (sixteen years ago)

god help those press releases

― TGAAPQ (Mr. Que), Friday, 6 November 2009 19:04 (sixteen years ago)

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